• qarbone@lemmy.world
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    2 months ago

    Not in a confrontational way but can you (or anyone) break down why this is a good? I’m sure I have a shallow view of poetry but I’m not seeing anything in it that is technically impressive

    • TheSambassador@lemmy.world
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      2 months ago

      Poetry isn’t just about being technical, it’s about communicating a thought or feeling. I relate to the feeling of time slipping away, and this poem communicates that feeling in a very effective way such that I feel a connection to the writer. That’s all.

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        2 months ago

        My understanding of poetry is that the level you’re describing is for decent poems and then excellent ones are doing interesting things technically while being as emotionally engaging.

        I’ll admit I was likely reading too deeply into the comments but I thought people were considering this poem excellent when it’s not at the level I described.

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      2 months ago

      O I am not a poetry gurl, I can not break things down, I’m so sorry! I just like the strange e.e. cummings structure and the ennui of it all.

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      2 months ago

      Coltrane once said of jazz: “if it sounds good it is good”. It’s okay if it doesn’t speak to you. Maybe the responses here gave you a different perspective and you could appreciate it. If it still doesn’t it’s still okay 🙂